Talk:Jonathan Lucroy/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Therapyisgood (talk · contribs) 23:08, 2 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Will look at this shortly. Therapyisgood (talk) 23:08, 2 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Lucroy began catching during his Little League Baseball career odd to call "Little League Baseball" a "career"
- Reworded.

he became the face of the franchise after Ryan Braun was implicated in the Biogenesis scandal. this is an extraordinary claim that requires a citation in the lead
- Added.

Lucroy also collected a number of honors no need for "also"
- Removed.

Umatilla High School officially retired no need for "officially"
- Removed.

Archive on ref 8 leads to OS home page.
- Replaced.

where his RBI-leading performance team or league?
- League. Specified.

There is no need to use the open access template on newspapers.com references, it's not really open source. I wouldn't use anything on them.
- Removed all.

That summer, Lucroy returned to the FCSL, this time helping no need for "this time"
- Removed.

while Louisiana–Lafayette clinched a spot in the 2007 NCAA Division I Baseball Tournament.[24] While two "whiles" too close together.
- Removed second.

Following his breakout 2008 season no need for "breakout"
- Removed entire phrase.

blowout loss no need for "blowout"
- Removed.

how did the Brewers finish the 2012 season?
- Added.

a potentially season-ending injury, not sure this is needed.
- Removed.

Bryan Holaday and Bobby Wilson, who had been platooning explain what "platooning" is in parenthesis.
- I don't believe this is necessary, as the term is linked. Specified that they were platooning the position, though.

to bolster a starting lineup entirely in their 20s. starting pitching lineup or starting batting lineup?
- Mostly pitching, but as their starting catcher was 25, I reworded.

reporters,"We're all running together. space after comma
- Done.

while throwing out 26 percent of attempted base runners a note on how this compares to other catchers in MLB would be appreciated.
- I have not been able to find a source that I would consider reliable on this without delving into OR territory, as the number fluctuates fairly regularly.

backstop → catcher
- Changed.

on July 29 in order to make room no need for "in order"
- Removed.

"Washington Nationals (2021)" this header should really be "Philadelphia Phillies, Chicago White Sox and Washington Nationals (2021)"
- Replaced, although I personally disagree, as he never appeared in games for the other two teams.

In "Oakland Athletics": link "40-man roster"
- Done.

he did make a brief postseason appearance this can be confusing to people who really don't know baseball when you say he made a "postseason appearance" but he didn't actually play for any teams.
- Reworded.

All files need personality rights templates at the Commons, see Commons:Template:Personality rights.
- Added to all.

Location used in ref 17 but not elsewhere.
- It is used there to distinguish the Opelousas Daily World from the ones in Vancouver, Aberdeen, Atlanta, and Greene County. I added the location in the one other source where the Daily World is cited, but feel no need to add it to sources like, say, the Milwaukee Journal Sentinel.

Don't start sentences with a year per MOS:NUMNOTES ("2013 was also the first season where Lucroy saw action at first base"). Therapyisgood (talk) 00:37, 3 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Rephrased.

Therapyisgood I am working on your comments. Been having some physical health issues that limit my screen time. Shouldn't take me more than a few days. Thank you for picking up this review. — Ghost River 19:12, 10 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Therapyisgood I have responded to all of your comments. — Ghost River 17:45, 11 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Passing. Therapyisgood (talk) 20:28, 14 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]