Talk:Dream Theater (album)/GA2

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Reviewer: DannyMusicEditor (talk · contribs) 18:24, 28 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

Hi, I'm DannyMusicEditor, and I would like to review this article. I saw good progress with its initial nomination and was disappointed when it failed. I'll do my best to give a fair review, this is only my second GA review and the first I've done for an album. It looks like much has been dealt with, and that can only be a good thing. dannymusiceditor ^{Speak up!} 18:24, 28 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  

   I'm finding this writing to be a little on the unencyclopedic tone. I think this article would do great with a copyedit. There's some stuff that I think would need clarified. I could list you several examples if you do so request.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  

   I'm not entirely sure if all of these are reliable. Some of the references used for reviews I've never even heard of before. I'm listening to your arguments, but if I've never seen them on any other album GA (which I've seen metal album GAs, I work with them), then I'm not confident passing it without some discussion or clarification. Also, I see you set all the accessdates in British date formatting (default). The subject is Canadian so you should write it like the rest of the ones in the article. I wouldn't fail for that, but I wouldn't pass either.

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects):   b (focused):  

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:  

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:  

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  

   Only complaint I have is the caption on Berklee. The reference at the end should explain some of these relations in the prose.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:  

@Ktmartell: You've done a great job and shown a lot of devotion to Dream Theater's albums. I commend you for your work. This is close, but no cigar - you can't complete this review within a reasonable amount of time. The prose issues are just too many in number, and once you get it copyedited, I'd even be willing to re-review this. The other fails shouldn't be hard, I hope. Again, if you'd like examples of my complaints, please just ask. dannymusiceditor ^{Speak up!} 19:42, 28 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

@DannyMusicEditor: Yes, please provide as many examples as possible for each failure. Thanks.--Ktmartell (talk) 18:17, 29 May 2016 (UTC)Reply